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ginainthekingsroad(I wanted to find this one again too. Still not a journal with actual posts in it.)
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You probably thought I'd pick a season 7 episode for DS9. But no! I pick 2x15, "Paradise". This is one of my mom's least favorite episodes ever. I think it has some potential. Unfortunately, I think the very best possible thing for it would be A.) movie-length- this thing's way too rushed- and B.) not Star Trek. But if it still has to be a DS9 story...
-First and foremost, get rid of the fucking punishment box. It's (unintentionally) kind of funny, not intimidating.
-Alixus needs a way better reason for creating the dampening field. Maybe I'm forgetting something, but a grudge against Starfleet for some reason would give her motivation and more reason to grate against Sisko.
-Play up her hypocrisy- the only way she can sustain her technology-free paradise is with some serious technology.
-More time for the story to develop would also help establish her brainwashing. It's been 10 years since the crash, but it doesn't feel that way at all. People who grew up with Federation-level luxury and have a lot of experience with advanced medicine and science aren't going to give up all their belief in that just because they're cut off from supplies. Alixus needs to establish fear and suspicion of advanced technology (claim it caused their crash?), and the writers can establish that by the colonists being way more hostile to Sisko and O'Brien until they give up their gear.
-That way, when the colonists stay there's more of an emotional payoff for the audience.
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You probably thought I'd pick a season 7 episode for DS9. But no! I pick 2x15, "Paradise". This is one of my mom's least favorite episodes ever. I think it has some potential. Unfortunately, I think the very best possible thing for it would be A.) movie-length- this thing's way too rushed- and B.) not Star Trek. But if it still has to be a DS9 story...
-First and foremost, get rid of the fucking punishment box. It's (unintentionally) kind of funny, not intimidating.
-Alixus needs a way better reason for creating the dampening field. Maybe I'm forgetting something, but a grudge against Starfleet for some reason would give her motivation and more reason to grate against Sisko.
-Play up her hypocrisy- the only way she can sustain her technology-free paradise is with some serious technology.
-More time for the story to develop would also help establish her brainwashing. It's been 10 years since the crash, but it doesn't feel that way at all. People who grew up with Federation-level luxury and have a lot of experience with advanced medicine and science aren't going to give up all their belief in that just because they're cut off from supplies. Alixus needs to establish fear and suspicion of advanced technology (claim it caused their crash?), and the writers can establish that by the colonists being way more hostile to Sisko and O'Brien until they give up their gear.
-That way, when the colonists stay there's more of an emotional payoff for the audience.
